Personal Grade of IOC
Criterion A: 5-6 I feel like I had a pretty good understanding of the text. I definitely repeated myself a lot when I wasn't sure what to say next, so I need to work on getting all my thoughts out there without too much repeating. I used good evidence from the text to support what I was saying about the context of this passage and how Offred felt about this society. I also gave background on the context of the book as a whole and related it to themes in the book.
Criterion B: 4 I feel like I highlighted language choices well but only described in great detail the effect that similes and metaphors had, but not as well when talking about 1st person. I didn't think it was bad, but I could have done a little deeper analysis
Criterion C: 3 I thought it was somewhat organized, I talked about the elements of my analysis in the order of the passage but it could have been more organized when relating my ideas to theme and author's purpose. The conclusion was awful so I really need to work on how I'm going to say a thought provoking conclusion in the real thing in order to end on a high note instead of the confusing mess I ended with in this one.
Criterion D: 3-4 I thought overall my language wasn't too bad. I did stumble a lot but that was because I was nervous and not really used to doing stuff like this. I still need to work on clear sentences though, and not switching from one thought to another without concluding.
Heather-
ReplyDeleteI feel like your self-assessment is a bit low, but I do agree with the feedback you gave yourself. Here are some suggestions:
I really like a lot of what you start to bring up, but I don't know if you thought enough about WHAT Atwood does to make you think of what the purpose of the passage is.
As far as organization- keep linking back to that statement at the beginning of each part/section. Remember that you don't need to go line by line (you can color code or number the examples you want to use). I think you got thrown off by looking at each line in order.
Make sure you bring in a bit more context as far as the novel overall (something little, like why it was written and a brief, brief summary (like 1-2 sentences). Additionally, make sure you really just focus on the passage itself and don't move too far beyond it.
I agree about the reader/effect...think about it like textual evidence of device/technique that supports thesis, what it's meaning is in the passage, and the effect/ what the reader should understand (why this technique/device as opposed to another...?)
Be sure you review all the IOC "stuff" I gave you guys...and don't be nervous- you are AMAZING!